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If a Rose Could Speak
Contributed by
amygirl1717
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Thursday, 4th February 2010 @ 11:07:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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If a rose could speak
What would it say?
Nothing compares to me
I’m beautiful in every way?
Or- you’re only here
When the sun shines
But when the sky darkens
Of you, there are no signs
When the wind howls
And the snow threatens to fall
I am left imprisoned
Behind your hand-made brick wall
You refuse to see my thorny steams
Only my purple, plump, petal mask
Instead of a crystal vase, you alternate
Between leaving me and stuffing me in a cheap ol’ cask
My roots trap me to this world
Stopping me from withering away
Though you still love me, and I you
You’ll still be the end of me one day…
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2010-02-04 11:07:41]
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Re: If a Rose Could Speak
(User Rating: 1 )
by laststarontheleft on
Friday, 5th February 2010 @ 02:46:39 AM AEST
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I really like this...
The way you have used the analogy of a beautiful yet fragile rose in anguish.
Cleverly written.....
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Re: If a Rose Could Speak
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by catapult57 on
Sunday, 7th February 2010 @ 06:30:32 PM AEST
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| So often, rhyming sounds forced and hackneyed, but you used it skillfully: never obtrusive and definitely Well done. I like the extended metaphor |
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