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breathe
Contributed by
ming
on
Thursday, 14th January 2010 @ 12:42:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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broke apart
in a tiny
thousand
fragments
then...
reassembled
a change
that shutters
over a crackling
of energy like
little silver/golden
stars cascading
perfect balance.
Copyright ©
ming
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2010-01-14 12:42:03]
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Re: breathe
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by laststarontheleft on
Thursday, 14th January 2010 @ 02:59:06 PM AEST
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This is really beautiful ming....
it conjures in my mind, the image of a myriad of mosaic pieces strewn across
the night sky lke fireworks, glistening in the moonlight!
Simply stunning x
Star x x x |
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Re: breathe
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by Bleedthelove on
Friday, 15th January 2010 @ 06:23:58 PM AEST
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I really like this poem because it's so profound, yet so simple. Great job.
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Re: breathe
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th January 2010 @ 07:20:20 PM AEST
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Ming;
I really enjoyed how you included as much imagery as you did in such a brief poem and I believe if you can do that then the poem itself doesn't have to be lengthy.
The imagery in this line to me made the poem have a bang at the end of it.
little silver/golden
stars cascading
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