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Earl Grey, and the ice king.
Contributed by
FleurdeSang
on
Wednesday, 6th January 2010 @ 02:18:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i am a complete tragedy
wrapped in an over-sized robe
that does not compliment;
hair is an
e x p l o s i o n
of artificial red,
dark, curly mass
that swells with sleep -
leftover eyeliner smudged
by hands that search for you
in dreams
and in waking -
eyes that are merely a shade lighter
than ****,
not worth falling into,
not compared to your butcher gaze
that softens, slightly,
when i smile
i tell you this
while standing over a pink mug
filled with tea that you steal
sips from
on occasion,
i tell you, secretly, that i know you love me
because your eyes, frequently frozen
and embittered
with their blue winters,
melt ,
so very slightly,
even now when i am
a waking beast of a tragedy,
even now as you take another sip
of Earl Grey
from a pink mug.
i know you love me because
you hate tea.
Copyright ©
FleurdeSang
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2010-01-06 14:18:06]
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by northernlights on
Wednesday, 6th January 2010 @ 02:30:39 PM AEST
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| Simple but warm and delightfully descriptive, warmer cuz I love early grey tea lol enjoyed this write |
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by Lilymaemax on
Wednesday, 6th January 2010 @ 02:36:46 PM AEST
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| Love the contrast of fragrant hot earlgrey and frozen ice king.lilymae |
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by spud on
Wednesday, 6th January 2010 @ 02:49:40 PM AEST
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Hi,
How refreshing to read a love poem that doesn't
sink into repetition or cliches .... yet grasps the
essence of blind unselfish love.
Not short on humour either!
Well done!!
Tommy
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by doug on
Thursday, 21st January 2010 @ 06:20:57 PM AEST
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| :) ... that last line made me laugh. I've never read one from you quite like this. Sounds as though you've found someone special. That's awesome. Your descriptions ( as always) are wonderful... I often wonder how you do it. I've spent hours before trying to get a gothic feel by somehow comparing spider webs to barren winter trees and a thousand other such ideas. I've often wondered how long it takes you to write your poems. I find if I work on one to long I lose the raw emotion but if I go to fast it often turns out like Frankenstein's monster.... a decent part here and there but overall ugly and poorly stitched together. You however seem to have no such problems. Your's are well put together and still intense and powerful. That's why you are one of my favorite poets. Truly , D |
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th April 2010 @ 11:36:38 AM AEST
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Completely and utterly captivating! That ending just blew me away. So THAT'S how you know, is it? (I've been looking for all the wrong signs .. lol) . I am indeed in awe of your talent. That opening is unbelievable! God, how many times have I thought that and never had the wit to aritculate it so perfectly! This was sensational. A love poem that doesn't feel like a soggy mess. Spectacular job!
Seléne ~
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Re: Earl Grey, and the ice king.
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by ming on
Wednesday, 28th July 2010 @ 01:22:49 PM AEST
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Most love poems gag me...:) but this was a horse of a different color. Lovely images (or not, LOL) with this write.
ming |
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