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The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
Contributed by
laststarontheleft
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Friday, 1st January 2010 @ 02:06:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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There's a lady in red
At the foot of my bed
So exhausted she looks
From the tears she has shed
"Please, help me", she cried
Such distress in her eyes
All her aura expelled
As she realised, she'd died
I rose up from my sleep
Took her gaze, held it deep
Then I reached out my hand
This, her secret, I'd keep
So I listened intently
And spoke to her gently
As she poured out her heart
Felt relief, so immensly
We sat there all night
Talking under moon's light
Till her eyes came a glow
And sun bathed her in white
Now she stands with a smile
Death no longer a trial
And, she visits me often
If only just for a while
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by lesoleilnoire on
Friday, 1st January 2010 @ 10:42:00 PM AEST
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Beautiful write. I love how you express this encounter of the supernatural so exquisitely.
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by northernlights on
Friday, 1st January 2010 @ 11:21:24 PM AEST
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| very visualise and personal as though a supernatural visit is something completely normal well captured |
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd January 2010 @ 12:36:32 AM AEST
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I really like the rhyme scheme in this one. Hmmmm...conversations with dead people, eh? How very interesting.
This initiated many associative memories in me. Perhaps I'll PM them to you someday. Very enjoyable.
Thank you.
Tim
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by longhaircg on
Saturday, 2nd January 2010 @ 07:55:50 AM AEST
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WOW Star, you captured not only the spirit but the words to discribe it, well done
I loved it.
sp |
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Fuzzy on
Saturday, 2nd January 2010 @ 09:37:03 AM AEST
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enjoyed this, have no idea how i would react
if i was visited, but i have a recurring dream
about a pet cat that i had put to sleep 5 years ago
sometimes it's as if i am not asleep at all.
Take care
Fuzzy
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd January 2010 @ 11:12:18 AM AEST
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The subconscience is wonderfully prolific
in this case helping us to mend in ways
we aren't even aware we are hurting
This write was refreshingly surreal
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 3rd January 2010 @ 08:41:25 AM AEST
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wow. Not just a spectral experience, but one of kindly assisting the ushering of someone's soul to the beyond. What a great dream, a great thought, a great poem! Beautifully put.
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by spud on
Tuesday, 5th January 2010 @ 03:22:05 AM AEST
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Hi,
I would guess that this relates to someone
who was close to you in the past (?) I'm sure
many of us experience similar visitations in our
sleep, but perhaps not many of us can put
that experience into words that you have so
eloquently written.
Well scribed!
Tommy
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th January 2010 @ 09:47:20 AM AEST
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A very nice, uplifting write with some great imagery and a nice fluency.
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 13th January 2010 @ 03:04:35 AM AEST
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nicely arranged and well written account of a supernatural experience. What would I do in your place? probably wet myself...
Spike |
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by deadwriter on
Wednesday, 13th January 2010 @ 05:27:08 PM AEST
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This piece stirs many memories. Fantastic read. Thank you.
Deadwriter
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Re: The Lady In Red At The Foot Of My Bed
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 15th January 2010 @ 12:50:46 PM AEST
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Perfect timing!!!! Loved this so much, as I've experienced the very same thing. Because I promised not to view my husband after he died, he never seemed dead to me. He came back to me almost every night in my dreams. He would rise from his coffin, and try to convince me he really wasn't dead at all! This happened for 5 years, until I finally became angry. I told him to stop coming back, that I was trying to live without him, and it was hurting me to see him again. He never returned after that!
This poem was so surreal! You are so talented dear..........keep up the good work.
If you'd care to read my poem "Death Wish"
http://www.your-poetry.com/modules.php?name=News&file=article&sid=21620
I will never make another "death wish"
Warm love,
connie |
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