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Numb
Contributed by
karoody
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Saturday, 5th April 2003 @ 05:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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it was a simple plan
my soul was in pain
you didn't care
so i shut it all out
closed my eyes
watched it go black
and you kept pushing
making brutal explosions
inside my head
attacking my mind
i try to fight the tears
can't let you see
but a smirk plays on your mouth
as you look into my eyes
look into my anguish
shut it out, shut it out
make my heart cold
pretend not to notice
when i'm forced to the edge
now i'm finally numb
i can walk away
free from your cage
but where is my heart?
guess i didn't win
the fire rages in this hell
but the ice remains
and i feel no pain, no gain
my soul in chains
cause being numb took it's toll
Copyright ©
karoody
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2003-04-05 17:05:00]
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Re: Numb
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 5th April 2003 @ 05:26:47 PM AEST
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Wow kara..this is awesome!! Can feel the emotions outpouring here.....
Hugs
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Re: Numb
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by roisin on
Saturday, 5th April 2003 @ 05:44:26 PM AEST
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feel the depth and emotion in this piece..a good write Kara...
rosie |
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Re: Numb
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by Lone_er on
Saturday, 5th April 2003 @ 09:07:27 PM AEST
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| Can feel the conflict in this poem and the plea of your soul- nicely done! |
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Re: Numb
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by venkat on
Sunday, 6th April 2003 @ 08:33:29 AM AEST
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| it is horrible my dear.. tears for you ..please.. come out off those painful thoughts, just lay your head on my shoulder and take rest, be peaceful dear friend.. peace be with you.. blessings ..venkat |
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Re: Numb
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by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 6th April 2003 @ 02:59:19 PM AEST
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aww hun, this is so sad, but such an impressive poem.
hugs all round!
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Numb
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by full_blur on
Sunday, 6th April 2003 @ 05:56:44 PM AEST
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| well crafted I really feel elemental forces when reading this one... |
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Re: Numb
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 7th April 2003 @ 03:52:00 AM AEST
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How well you describe a very common experience, particularly for women. It has openned my mind to an attitude I've detected in all too many.
Thank you so much for showing me "the view from the other side of the fence.........................................."
Guilty male now does sly coverup and slinks away......................... |
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Re: Numb
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by Apartment213 on
Monday, 7th April 2003 @ 04:06:23 AM AEST
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| kara i can relate but well u know that, i love this poem i feel every word u wrote! |
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Re: Numb
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by AngryPrincess on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 01:38:18 PM AEST
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wow kara, perfect. the only word that comes to mind. well done. ((kara))
Lindsey |
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Re: Numb
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by Feelin_Like_A_SadFellow on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 09:27:33 PM AEST
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| yet again another great poem that tells a story so true yet so awful from such a nice person - Sid |
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Re: Numb
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by mckayla on
Thursday, 17th April 2003 @ 05:20:59 PM AEST
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I agree!! you have poared out tons of emotion in this write!! what a great read!
kat |
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