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illusion
Contributed by
ming
on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 09:47:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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paler shade
underground
this time-slice
of what so very lull
programme ghosts
juxtapostioned
Zen-like
slip-streamed
breathless
hardwired
to the cosmos
fabric of reality
life and humanity
twist of fate
the dark side
shows...
Copyright ©
ming
... [
2009-12-18 09:47:23]
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Re: illusion
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by laststarontheleft on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 09:52:50 AM AEST
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This is so cleverly crafted!
I love the way you've spun these words together
to create a myriad of magic!
Great write...
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Re: illusion
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 11:26:57 AM AEST
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It's an understatement to say you're a natural
Your Poems unite the reader with the mind set you were in
This particular write,is very abstract, yet deeply cohesive
-D.Truth |
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Re: illusion
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by EternitysLyre on
Saturday, 19th December 2009 @ 11:55:53 AM AEST
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I've been going through your poems out of curiosity, and think this poem is exemplary of what I'm going to say.
You have a marvel of a knack for metaphor, for juxtaposed words and images that become striking, vivid. And from the immense volume of your posts, it looks like that wellspring isn't going to dry anytime soon. That is your talent.
As I read more and more of your poems, however, I began to notice that understanding them was difficult; so much as omitted, from punctuation to prepositions to articles, to subjects, to predicates, that each poem read like a run-on haiku. I struggled to grasp your intended meaning, and there's some merit in considering the balance between ambiguity of language and length.
I have to ask you, are these stream-of-consciousness chains of words as they come to you? Or are you trying to piece together an experience through a myriad of words? Because as much as I enjoy a good metaphor, I don't want to read your poems and mistakenly think they're to be read at face value, like admiring graffiti from your seat on the bus, if they're meant to be more. |
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