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As the Light Falls
Contributed by
fallensaint
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Monday, 14th December 2009 @ 07:32:22 PM in AEST
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As the light falls
And you shut your eyes
Your heartbeat slows
And a part of you dies
Your soul begins to burn
And your body starts bleeding
Your mind begs for death
Screaming at you, ever so pleading
You feel the disgust
The destructive hate
You open your eyes
For you know your fate
All hope is gone
No one will care
As the blade crosses your throat
Your blink becomes stare
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by Voice of the Silent on
Monday, 14th December 2009 @ 08:03:18 PM AEST
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Let me be the first to welcome you to the site,
Great poem you should post the other ones you got in that notebook :)
Hope to read more soon
-not like I have to tell you
-Kelly |
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by shelby on
Monday, 14th December 2009 @ 08:50:40 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
This is a well written verse, filled with sadness I felt thick in the room around me.
Though I do not like to touch base much on suicide type poems........
I will watch for more of your work...
Peace
Michelle |
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by Fuzzy on
Tuesday, 15th December 2009 @ 01:23:53 AM AEST
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Very well written.
Take care |
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th December 2009 @ 02:45:39 PM AEST
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Poets are like actors, living out a plot
but you'll know for sure how close they are
to the flame when you feel the burn.
Despair is a dark place your words do not contracict.
Well written!
-D.Truth |
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by ChaosFactor on
Monday, 28th December 2009 @ 08:23:38 AM AEST
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| I like the way you use imagery.. I can really see what you're saying. I know the feeling, but take care. |
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Re: As the Light Falls
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by brittany24 on
Tuesday, 29th December 2009 @ 05:35:37 PM AEST
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| wow love this poem.I have felt this way a time or two. keep up the good work. |
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