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My World
Contributed by
DoubleS
on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 01:43:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Look in to my eyes
You'll see your reflection,
Within every lie
There is a correction.
As you look at the world
Your mind is in place,
View into my mind
As it's in outer space.
You'll see all the stars
With the sun and the moon,
You'll see a new planet
A moment too soon.
The planet is small
Just big enough for two,
Get closer and closer
There's me and there's you.
Hold hands in the day
And continue till night,
But in my one world
There is something to fright.
The closer we get
The farther we drift,
Till one day your gone
Like a ghost or a myth.
But then a bell rings
I awake from the fright,
Right then i realized
It's still only night.
I dreamt a whole world
Just for me and for you,
As I looked at the sky
It's color is blue.
It made me think of you
Your looks and your eyes,
As yor favorite color
Filled the nighttime sky.
I turn to a mirror
Felt sad, felt lonely
Wishing that you were
My one and my only...
Copyright ©
DoubleS
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2009-12-12 13:43:53]
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Re: My World
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by Fuzzy on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 01:50:07 PM AEST
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This is very, very good, you said It's also my first poem ever , well i look forward to many more, this well written.
Take care |
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Re: My World
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 02:06:54 PM AEST
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Good effort she must have really been inspiring for you.
Good luck there too
Peter |
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Re: My World
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by laststarontheleft on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 02:36:52 PM AEST
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Hi there!
this is a fantastic first write!
Actually very romantic as i saw it.
I can't wait to read more of your creations x
Star x x x |
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Re: My World
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by Voice of the Silent on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 07:25:09 PM AEST
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I'm glad I picked this to be the first poem I've read in weeks
I liked this poem a lot it's one of the best I've read, lol and usually I don't like long poems but you keep my attention and for that and writing a great poem
I say kudos
and I hope to read more soon
-Kelly |
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Re: My World
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 14th December 2009 @ 07:49:52 PM AEST
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| well done |
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