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spaceship
Contributed by
simonwrite
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Thursday, 10th December 2009 @ 02:02:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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This feels, out of place
Sitting, watching ghosts make small talk
I’m not from here, I’m not like them
An open mouth expelling white noise
To muted ears, and distracted minds
The one who wants to be heard is struck dumb
The one who wants to be seen, is transparent
Mr. cellophane should have been my name
Misconstrued pile of movie quotes and witty jokes
Talk but say nothing
But remain, be a raincloud
If you cant brighten someones day
Might as well darken it
That’s the spirit that keep drunkards down
And madmen on the wrong side of the line
A crazy notion to sit and hope by listening
Reverse osmosis will spark a transformation
You scare me, I think I’ll head back to my spaceship
Warp speed to the limits of earshot
Sit quietly in a corner
Try to learn something.
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simonwrite
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2009-12-10 14:02:26]
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Re: spaceship
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by 143 on
Thursday, 10th December 2009 @ 02:06:26 PM AEST
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VERY DIFFERENT!
Hmmmm...Spaceship, But indeed I really enjoyed how you placed unique words together, leaving them matching up like a,b and c ....Awesome write, Very good!!!
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Re: spaceship
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by Xnoybis on
Saturday, 12th December 2009 @ 06:32:51 AM AEST
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I really liked this one.
"Warp speed to the limits of earshot" and beyond brought it home nicely.
Keep mining that vein.
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