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~Questions In Time~
Contributed by
inkmaster
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Wednesday, 9th December 2009 @ 10:06:51 AM in AEST
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~Questions in time ~
If I have lost how
To feel will you,
Be here for me.
When I cant take
The ups and downs of life
Anymore will you,
Be here for me.
When I wake up in
A gray way,
Will you still be here
For me.
When I am old, and worn out
Will you be here,
for me.
If my soul gets lost again
Will you be here,
For me.
When I am feeling rough
Will you be here,
For me.
If there are no more
Afters and no more befores
Will you be here,
For me.
If I rocking in a corner
Will you be here,
For me.
When my life is ready
To end
Will you be here,
For me.
I will be here always,
For here for you..
Inkmaster (C) 2009
Copyright ©
inkmaster
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2009-12-09 10:06:51]
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Re: ~Questions In Time~
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by laststarontheleft on
Wednesday, 9th December 2009 @ 10:36:03 AM AEST
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This is really lovely, nicely written.
something we all hope for.. complete trust in eachother to last forever.
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Re: ~Questions In Time~
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by Fuzzy on
Wednesday, 9th December 2009 @ 10:59:10 AM AEST
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Well written, and well done hope all goes well.
Take care |
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Re: ~Questions In Time~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 09:33:41 AM AEST
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I certainly would not think it. Why would you say such a thing?
I know you once asked for "solid" feedback, I believe? Well, I suppose a person's definition of that could vary. I think anyone who takes the time to read and comment should be thanked...and respected, unless they flat out make an attack on you. A writer...a poet should be thankful for their "fans". Is that solid? I think so.
But again, observations:
Cant and can't are two entirely different words.
If I rocking in a corner? Should it be If I'm rocking in a corner?
By no means am I an expert and will never consider myself such. However, I am a reader and by reading I think it makes for a much more enjoyable read if words are more proper in their usage. When the reader has to stop and make sense of the word or typo and say, "Oh I see what he/she means", it breaks the flow of the poetry.
Take care and I'm sure you'll get there.
Tim
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