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Clarity
Contributed by
jjayjay25
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Friday, 4th December 2009 @ 05:15:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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I can see through it
The other side is the same
All caught up in the name of it
So dreary it appears
For sure it will disappear
Dissipate into the mist
For it is not a gift
Nor to be given
Only thought of
As the clearer it is
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2009-12-04 17:15:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Clarity
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aspirant on
Friday, 4th December 2009 @ 06:48:58 PM AEST (User
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I like it. It seems to hide its meaning at first but after reading a few times it becomes... clearer.
I think I would consider rewording the 5th line, though. "For sure it will disappear" sounds awkward to me, since we would normally say "It will disappear for sure". I would suggest changing it to something like "Surely it will disappear".
The last 2 lines interest me since they seem to describe the concept of "clarity" as a somewhat enigmatic thing. |
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