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What happened
Contributed by
closp0215
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Sunday, 1st November 2009 @ 01:04:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I say I love you, you turn your back. I hug you, you push away. I lean in for a kiss, you leave me like a fool. You say you love me, I feel betrayed. You hug me, it doesn’t feel right. What happened to us?
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Re: What happened
(User Rating: 1 ) by razorbladekisses on
Sunday, 1st November 2009 @ 01:41:36 PM AEST (User
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I like it. It's sad. And simple.
I think you should move it to more lines, though. Instead of all on one.
Overall, great job(:
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Re: What happened
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ambivalence on
Monday, 2nd November 2009 @ 11:57:37 AM AEST (User
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second thoughts possibly? maybe the fire just needs to be rekindled again... this was a good concise write
take care
-K.Z. |
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