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Withdraw
Contributed by
Inevitable
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Friday, 23rd October 2009 @ 11:20:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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(This is all your fault
you did this to yourself)
the voices whispering and tugging at my mind
'cause I can't help it if I wanna feel safe inside
when everything is dark and gray
when I am sad, holding hands with empty promises
the coldness of you.
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Inevitable
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2009-10-23 11:20:45]
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Re: Withdraw
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd October 2009 @ 05:21:54 PM AEST
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Powerful use of brackets at the start, that really worked. This was a very spontaneous write and you packed a lot of punch into 7 lines.
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Re: Withdraw
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by Ambivalence on
Friday, 23rd October 2009 @ 05:38:38 PM AEST
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it feels good to stray from the guilty conscience at times, just to lessen the shame.
intriguing poem
take care
-K.Z.
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Re: Withdraw
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th October 2009 @ 12:12:00 AM AEST
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If we lose in the ol' game of life, we do seem to beat ourselves up, do we not? I suppose all we can do is plod on, eh? Uh, after we go into seclusion for a while.
Nicely done, my dear.
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