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Your Night
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Tuesday, 20th October 2009 @ 07:10:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Do you think I could be beautiful
as only storms can be,
to the windswept cliffs upon the tips
of the waves that sweep the sea
right where I stand, my heart in hand,
where it will always be.
Through darkened skies as tides will rise
and the zephyr blow me down
with deep sea spray I'll fly away
but the sky will stand its ground
till to the sea I'll fall away
and there I'll surely drown
Do you think I could be beautiful
as only sunset knows
if on the cliffs the earth will kiss
me quickly as I go
to fly to you above the waves
through heavens earthly glow
just to drown among the night
while the storm above me grows
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st October 2009 @ 01:01:52 PM AEST (User
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Ethereal, and yet heavy like the sea at the same time. I love the rhyme scheme. It gives it a "I don't want to stop reading this" type of flair.
And of course you know you are beautiful! |
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorguesMatter on
Monday, 26th October 2009 @ 01:51:21 AM AEST (User
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I love the way you let the words captivate you-Morgues |
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by spud on
Wednesday, 28th October 2009 @ 09:10:24 AM AEST (User
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Hi,
Anyone who can write like this, IS beautiful!!
Tommy
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by Loende on
Wednesday, 28th October 2009 @ 04:30:46 PM AEST (User
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My sweet, Philly...
I wish that I could wish you here. This is
a truly wonderful piece though, so we'll
have that, until you come back across
the waves once more.
Love,
~me |
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 01:32:13 AM AEST (User
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My initial reaction to the very first line was you are beautiful.
Dreams not coming true (yet) by no means indicates that you are not good enough. I think things in life just take time. Perhaps a test of faith? I don't know. Obviously I am not a philosopher nor a genius.
I however do know that you are still a very gifted poet and this poem definitely proves that.
See? I'm right about some things.
Tim
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Re: Your Night
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Friday, 2nd May 2014 @ 12:47:56 AM AEST (User
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this is so beautifully penned, truly lovely!
hugs n' love nessa |
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