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scars
Contributed by
pat888
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Monday, 19th October 2009 @ 06:26:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
AmericanTragedy
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she was a loser, she was a friend
just trying to make it to the end
couldn't pull the trigger
left there thinking
one more time alone drinking
her release she wouldn't tell
saw the scars knew fine well
that razzor tattoo she made for you
you found her breathing
lying ther past out
just as you were leaving
lying there past out
lost all she believed in
didn't even help her out
did you pass her the blade
did you clean up your mess
did you pour her the drink
wiould you lay her to rest
what did you do
where did she go
threw her life
straight out the window
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Re: scars
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by AngelFox on
Monday, 19th October 2009 @ 06:47:08 PM AEST
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| Very sad indeed! I felt the emotions coming out of this poem. Great read! |
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Re: scars
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by shelby on
Monday, 19th October 2009 @ 07:00:44 PM AEST
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A heart breaking write, one of those that hits close to me. Good work and welcome to YPDC.
Michelle |
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Re: scars
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by LevyMetal on
Monday, 19th October 2009 @ 09:52:44 PM AEST
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oh my god! im in love! This poem is absolutely amazing, and hits close to home. Its beautiful and truthful...my fave part??
"did you pass her the blade
did you clean up your mess
did you pour her the drink
wiould you lay her to rest "
i will read your other work... please keep writing! |
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Re: scars
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 20th October 2009 @ 09:39:58 AM AEST
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| Lots of feeling and expression in this poem i agree with levymetal best verse did you pass her the blade................very powerful questioning and aportioning blame |
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