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Stop the Rain
Contributed by
Clayman
on
Tuesday, 13th October 2009 @ 02:20:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Pouring concrete
over my tinsel heart
I promised myself
invulnerability
to your hurts.
Holding the phone to his ear,
hearing you cringe out sadness
was a scatter-blast, jackhammering
my inner workings to wet gunpowder.
Your defeated tremors caressed
fireworks into me like acidic salve.
Promises have destinies that expire.
Every tear liberated was
a snail, balancing on
a needle tip, corroding
wearily, as it tried to stand
up to my salty reign.
Heartlessness exiled,
suddenly with a will of its own,
eluding me, forsaking me...
I used to shut you out easily
like a leathery curtain
slicing off sunlight,
but for a blink of eternity
I felt.
-Svw
Copyright ©
Clayman
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2009-10-13 02:20:39]
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Re: Stop the Rain
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by CwisssStunnaaa on
Tuesday, 13th October 2009 @ 02:54:15 PM AEST
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love the write
keep up the nice work |
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Re: Stop the Rain
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th October 2009 @ 07:04:17 AM AEST
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Of course, although she was a sadly inept mother, she is still a person. At least you remembered this in all the relief and elation you must be feeling at the moment. But she blew her chance and now you're the one having to pick up the pieces of her neglect. Your son matters the most, which I am sure you know.
Stay strong
-Phil
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Re: Stop the Rain
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by LadyRose on
Wednesday, 14th October 2009 @ 07:52:12 AM AEST
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| Beautifully written I must say........deep to an extent......love your style...makes me want to read it over and over again........ |
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Re: Stop the Rain
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by ming on
Sunday, 18th October 2009 @ 11:48:14 AM AEST
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This is my favorite in your poem...
Every tear liberated was
a snail, balancing on
a needle tip, corroding
wearily, as it tried to stand
up to my salty reign.
I am glad I found your writings. Off to read more... |
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