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Surrender
Contributed by
spike
on
Friday, 9th October 2009 @ 08:16:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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I could have sheltered from the rain,
found a tree to sit beneath;
a fragile canopy of green,
a dry enclave for some relief
Instead I let the droplets in,
to soak the hair and tease the tongue;
to run their path along the spine
and pinch the skin with icy calm
Drenched and shivering with cold,
I raised my face to violent skies
and calmly watched the thunderheads
throw lightening bolts before my eyes
Storms can be unpredictable
and punish curiosity;
I could have sheltered, none to blame
instead, I gave myself to rain.
Copyright ©
spike
... [
2009-10-09 20:16:44] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th October 2009 @ 02:44:02 AM AEST (User
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A superb poem with intoxicating imagery and a wonderful fluency. Magical! |
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Re: Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by LadyRose on
Saturday, 10th October 2009 @ 08:42:32 AM AEST (User
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made want to do the same......give myself to rain.......let go of all that waters within,let go of storms inside.........beautiful imagery indeed |
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Re: Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by elle on
Wednesday, 14th October 2009 @ 07:57:28 PM AEST (User
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A wonderful scenario of giving oneself & yet remaining whole. While reading this
gives the feeling of freedom & release, the real thing is so powerful & yet tranquilizing. . .
Nice touch. Elle :) |
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Re: Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorguesMatter on
Monday, 26th October 2009 @ 02:42:03 AM AEST (User
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Simply profound-Morgues |
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Re: Surrender
(User Rating: 1 ) by laststarontheleft on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 01:35:32 PM AEST (User
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This is absolutely stunning, i feel so calm and peaceful after reading this.
Thankyou so much x
Star x x x |
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