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She
Contributed by
karoody
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Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 09:45:00 PM in AEST
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She lived in that little house on the corner
That little girl was so beautiful-
Everyone agreed.
No one would talk to her
They thought her to be strange
But I was convinced there was much more
I saw the storm in her eyes.
We finally spoke a few months back
She told me of her life
Everyday with tear stained cheeks
Marks of pain, lasting for weeks
I learned of the angry voices
And every brutal blow.
I wanted so badly to help-
Thought I'd done the right thing
But the screaming grew louder
And the hitting a lot harder.
I walked past her house the other day
An ambulance was in the street-
A little girl inside...
The medics shook their head
"It's no use," they said.
But I guess you never noticed
It was easier to turn your head.
Copyright ©
karoody
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2003-03-31 21:45:00]
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Re: She
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by PhantomsLDY on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 04:20:42 AM AEST
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| This is so sad but well done!!!! |
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Re: She
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 08:11:15 AM AEST
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| These thoughts i read in your earlier poem..but this it self is a new poem with a vivid painting of unknown she.. this is a good poetical work, captures my heart. but to me it is not easier to turn my head. I think the title does not attract your readers..but this is a good piece... venkat |
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Re: She
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 03:19:35 PM AEST
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Kara very good, but so sad... I don't really know what to say except I am glad u didn't experience this. I love the mood u put this poem in.
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Re: She
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 03:21:56 PM AEST
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Kara very good, but so sad... I don't really know what to say except I am glad u didn't experience this. I love the mood u put this poem in.
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Re: She
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 03:21:56 PM AEST
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Kara very good, but so sad... I don't really know what to say except I am glad u didn't experience this. I love the mood u put this poem in.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: She
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 03:53:08 PM AEST
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Great write..on such a sad topic... and I agree...the title does nothing for a poem such as this...
Missed chatting with you, Kara..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: She
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 2nd April 2003 @ 01:13:24 AM AEST
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thanx for reading it, i know the title does nothing for the poem, but i never title my work until i post...and couldn't think of one here.
kara
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Re: She
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by Feelin_Like_A_SadFellow on
Wednesday, 2nd April 2003 @ 04:02:14 PM AEST
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| this is such a great narrative poem... so sad how true this fictional poem is though kara... but the transistion from time to time is captured so well by your hand great write |
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Re: She
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by AngryPrincess on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 01:48:12 PM AEST
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kara, OMG! I feel like SHE could be me, just without the sad ending. The little girl in the ambulance was me 7 years ago. So thank you, thank you so much. I cried while i read this over and over, but it was a good cry. That was the day i was saved. :O)
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Re: She
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 10:02:15 PM AEST
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| sad and very creative, hugs nessa |
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Re: She
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 10:04:09 PM AEST
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| i meant to say also that it has a very strong message even if it is made up because it applies to each of us and all children, ty, |
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