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STAR
Contributed by
recyclebin
on
Saturday, 26th September 2009 @ 11:02:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Situation
All my life,
I want to believe,
Waiting for love.
For the moment,
To see you fall,
From the heavens above
Task
My dreams empty,
Without someone,
like you…
Keeping my
Heart focused,
So hard to do…
Action
Endless wishes,
Survival is dreary
Without your light.
My defense,
Is the hope,
That you’ll appear tonight.
Result
Never before in these eyes,
Has love ,
Been more true…
Carve the darkness,
Come to me,
I believe in you...
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recyclebin
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2009-09-26 23:02:25]
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Re: STAR
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th September 2009 @ 11:22:42 PM AEST
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Well, Sir Bin, I am not sure I got the exact meaning of the poem, but nevertheless, I do indeed like it.
For one, I like (as I refer to them) the action words between the stanzas. lol.. especially since I have been known to do that myself.
But like I said, I wasn't sure I completely understood it as in the third stanza sort of threw me off as it seemed possibly you meant to say "my defense is" instead of my defenses. I am in no way demeaning you...simply a response to your author's note and my own ineptness at times to comprehend.
It seemed to me you were hoping that this perfect woman of your dreams to appear as if you did not know exactly who she was yet but know what you'd like her to be like; but then I thought maybe you do know she is.... sorry, I am a bit clueless at times.
Take care dude.
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Re: STAR
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th September 2009 @ 11:27:26 PM AEST
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| P.S. I thought my star dropped from the heavens once, too, but it turned out to be more like Satan's claw rose from the depths. :P |
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Re: STAR
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by Recyclebin on
Saturday, 26th September 2009 @ 11:31:17 PM AEST
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Timo ..
Remember that old saying.
Be careful what you wish for???
:o) ~Bin~ |
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Re: STAR
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th September 2009 @ 06:16:51 AM AEST
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Oh dear conjurer of wishes and dreams .... what a grand one this is!
Each verse is a step on a path, it seems. Like a plan you've laid down
and intend to follow, (all things willing of course. :P) I's simple elegance
breathes the lightest touch of deepest beauty. Soft and delicate, like the
petals of a flower. And just as enchanting to behold.
Wonderful post!
~ Breezy
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Re: STAR
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by emystar on
Sunday, 27th September 2009 @ 05:12:06 PM AEST
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A bit sad but incredibly beautifull.
Will just any ole star do? smiles.
Awesome, unique, romantic,
emy
How can any one not luv this? |
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Re: STAR
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by lesoleilnoire on
Sunday, 27th September 2009 @ 07:24:29 PM AEST
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I love this piece. I hope I can see a shooting star at some point in my life. I know in this poem it seems the star represents the time your meet your perfect soul mate. My intrepretation could be off since I only read this once. No matter what your intended meaning, I found it amazing or beautiful.
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Re: STAR
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by Starchild7 on
Tuesday, 13th October 2009 @ 03:01:06 PM AEST
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Thank you for sharing this it's so beautiful and its quite mystical i really enjoyed reading this one:), very breathtaking.
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