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betrayal outta control

Contributed by hetlerkh on Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 01:26:38 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

betrayal is going far outta control
my own hands are struggling ma throat
my body is fighting ma own soul
my lungs are chocking my own heart
in my back your knife left a hole

what happened ...how did it happen
i wined for a chance ......he gave me three
i throwed those away ...
i was so dump ...i get in dumpiness the highest digree

i wanna hang ma self to the closest tree
i wanna drown ma self in the deepest sea
its nobody's fault its me !
i betrayed ma own self ....
now i gotta collect my heart debris

would i have one more shot ?
this time i wont second guess
i wont think twice
this time it will be a success
i wont lose mt confidence
this time am changing this mess

whatever the consequences are gonna be
whatever is the fee
i agree
just let me feel that am free

Copyright © hetlerkh ... [ 2009-09-25 01:26:38]
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Re: betrayal outta control (User Rating: 1 )
by elle on Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 07:15:28 AM AEST
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Hi Dude,
I say two thumbs up ( this is very good) for the impact of emotion you've given the page.
The most powerful statement you've made here

"it's nobody's fault it's me !"

I must applaud this most intimate & personal reflection. Everywhere, there is someone
or something to blame for our pain. Mostly, we choose.

Also, I feel your rhyming structure & style are maturing. . . !

Take care. elle :)

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