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Course To Die
Contributed by
Clayman
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Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 03:38:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
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.c.Silenced by solemnity i sit
knowing the bombs will drop soon.
Everything will change
as reality coughs up the phlegm
to absolve this caustic cage of life
i percieve as truth.
I should be smiling
yet there is remorse.
A few hundred passings of the sun
i spent, assembling this attack,
so beautiful and rigid
like a shiny scythe readied to reap.
To repair.
Blackened by fabrications
i ready myself for victory
over a war i never wished to wage,
this vessel of pain
i do not pray to share
but obligation impales me.
Time to erase your anchor
and release your foundation.
I am sorry
for this fist of splinters you have to eat,
it's just the way things are,
nothing personal.
Now bleed.
-Svw
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Clayman
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Re: Course To Die
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by navydocny on
Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 06:00:09 AM AEST
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I can feel something through this...
very good work.
keep up the posts!
Steve |
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Re: Course To Die
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by pooja on
Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 06:36:36 AM AEST
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Saying ur poem is beautiful, doesn't seem right
a true to life portrayal of a soldier's conflicts
extremely well-written
damn the ironies of life...
God bless. |
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Re: Course To Die
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by LadyRose on
Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 08:57:30 AM AEST
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| these words are stronger than strenght.......seeing things from your point of view makes me feel different.....always wanted to be a soldier......maybe I am not strong enough for that...I'll stick to being a nurse..........although these words speak strenght and weakness all together,I take my hat off for you,and yet I am sad for you......feeling so strong about death?....cant be a good thing....but well written through these words.Thanks for letting me see what you see. |
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Re: Course To Die
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by dirk-velvet on
Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 05:44:50 PM AEST
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Your words are perfectly placed to paint
a picture of cold and pure
battle.
"everything will change".
(great line !)
( nice write ! )
Peace&Love
my friend
Dirk-Velvet |
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