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in the garden.......
Contributed by
LadyRose
on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 08:45:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The wind blows crisply
across my face.
All curled up I sit
in the mist of my fear.
The leaves fall one by one
on the ground.
The grass the only foundation I found.
The green means life in this garden,
chlorofil filled,living plants...
not like me,feeling dead inside.....
The sun shines but not strong enough.
Chilly shivers run down my back.
All the flowers blooming look so pretty,
yet the beauty is gone in it.
This is the place I barried our love.
Under the soil of this garden.
This is where it will grow.
Six feet under......
in every flower,plant or tree,
the love I have for you will rise beautifully......
But as time goes
and after all the beauty is done,
it will die......
still softly inbedded in soil
....I will be the lonely one
in this garden.......
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LadyRose
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2009-09-15 08:45:47]
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Re: in the garden.......
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by TsunamiWaverider on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 09:17:42 AM AEST
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I mean no offence but i spotted what i believe is a mistake....and if you are like me, you don't want your poems posted with errors.
"This is the place I barried our love." I assume you mean 'buried'?
BTW...nicely written. |
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Re: in the garden.......
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 10:33:16 AM AEST
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Ah, unsolicited advice...such a lovely thing.
Anyway, lovely poem. Sad poem. The imagery and emotion intertwined work well here. Nicely done, my dear.
Thank you,
Tim |
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Re: in the garden.......
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 07:39:02 PM AEST
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rose, the imagery is breathtaking, but this is so exceptionally sad.
I suppose love can be like that, and in that respect it lives and breathes
inside your poem. So painfully beautiful, hun.
~ Breezy
(I'm with Tim on the advice thingy ... geeze people. Can't you PM
stuff like that? Don't you think your pointing it out publicly will
also mar it?) |
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Re: in the garden.......
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 10:59:33 PM AEST
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Rose,
this poem is beautiul but as Rox said, it is so sad. I love the way you compared love to the garden. I hope that you are feeling better soon, it makes me sad to know you are sad.
So I am sending you a super huge long distance Shelby hug HUG HUG HUG
love ya
Michelle |
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