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voice. . .
Contributed by
elle
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Monday, 14th September 2009 @ 05:24:03 PM in AEST
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conclusion licks the air
to meaning, taste.
gravel, hauntingly confessive
passionate
tongued -tied
knot. . .
release me
into gentle release
or hurl me
raging, raging
into regret
head-banging spectacle
raving. . .
whisper or vibration
monotone or sonic boom
exacting solitary note or doubtful orchestra
verbed into the fitful end
of acceptance
or denial
as mercy murmurs. . .
speak to me
speak to me
rescue me. . . from the violent hiss of exhaustion
kinder than the inelegant flaw
words shrugged off by speechless dross,
into softest,
sweetest
unpredictable
naked noise. . .
Copyright ©
elle
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2009-09-14 17:24:03]
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Re: voice. . .
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 12:11:20 AM AEST
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Holy dented metal, Batman !!!!!!!! (expletive replaced by corny phrase)
OMG!!!! Again, I am not sure I really understand this at first read but the imagery just blew me away.
But I needed to at least type a completely impulsive initial reaction comment before the feeling eluded me.
Me
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Re: voice. . .
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by one-curly-fry on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 03:44:54 AM AEST
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This has a beautiful flow through of thoughts and feelings - it really carried me along.. It had a sense of emptiness and need to it. I really liked the last two stanzas - very good way of pulling the piece together and making it whole.
Great write - as always Elle! :-)
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Re: voice. . .
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 06:05:41 PM AEST
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Great write. What an awesome cacophony! Naked noise, indeed. Naked, raw and powerful.
The sounds (whispers, vibrations, booms and hisses) in this clamor for preeminence, but the emotion-drenched cry, "rescue me" seems to rise above it all, a "solitary note" if you will, and it still echoes in my thoughts.
If only you would tell me how.... |
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Re: voice. . .
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 18th September 2009 @ 03:24:53 PM AEST
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The command you have of words is awe inspiring.
Certainly a unique style, makes the reader sit up and take notice.
Steve |
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Re: voice. . .
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th September 2009 @ 12:12:15 AM AEST
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| And if they smoked, they just make light one up after that. |
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Re: voice. . .
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by ming on
Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 09:31:55 AM AEST
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| And 'when' you get published I'll be one of the first in line to buy your tome. Thank uou for sharing your art! |
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