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beneath the surface
Contributed by
elle
on
Sunday, 13th September 2009 @ 04:34:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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observation. . .
blood blister
rising slowly
through the pain
evidence
of something squeezed somehow
into existence
but (substance?)
that slowly. . . . . . . fades
away
into the hollow of the skin
sometimes
brash & coloured red
oft' times
(leaving) empty
insincere wound. . .
Copyright ©
elle
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2009-09-13 04:34:29]
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Re: beneath the surface
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th September 2009 @ 10:57:45 AM AEST
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| Ah, another hint of the mystique of Elle. Me wonders about that spelling of color... and well the rest of this too. |
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Re: beneath the surface
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by hetlerkh on
Monday, 14th September 2009 @ 04:54:17 PM AEST
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hmm well i loved it !
i have read many many of ur poems ..
and i can just say to my self that my english sucks !
heh u can just put all u want in 3 or 4 words ...
keep it up elle !
really i love this one the most ..
:)
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Re: beneath the surface
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by one-curly-fry on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 03:57:31 AM AEST
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Great poem! I did something similar a few years ago - but in my case it was this mark that seemed to be there for ages and then disappeared as though it had never happened.. I liked the metaphor that it gave me and with your piece too, it gives a lot more than what you first read (however, in ur case, it's written far more beautifully than mine).
Isn't it great great when life gives you simple things that make you just stop and think?
Insincere wound - excellent summing up of the piece.
Great write! :-D
Tim |
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