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* MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
Contributed by
venkat
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Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 09:21:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Night camped in my heart
with all her dark rain bearing clouds
and with flashes of lightening
told me ' the address of rain is sky
and my address is your heart'
I held her captive in my heart
chewed her lightenings betwen my teeth
kneaded her clouds with my fingers
to give her a shape suitable to my sleep
and my journey into the world
of my fairy lands of mermaids, nymphs
angels, goddesses, into a winged world.
Souls slained in the revolt of flowers
were melting in multitudes in my song
tuned half awake overflowing my lips.
Bunches of mango fruits were hanging
like full moons pouring delight.
My midnight dreams were washing
the wounds of my heart with bliss.
-venkat
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venkat
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2009-09-09 21:21:25]
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Re: * MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 09:27:45 PM AEST
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Dearest Venkat,
Dreams are so capricious. One minute they
can sweep you away in glory and the next they
can bring gravity to bear. This is a lovely write
though, that shows a yearning and peace.
One line in particular struck me as quite
amazing:
"to give her a shape suitable to my sleep"
I don't know why exactly, just that it makes an
awful lot of sense to me. At any rate, you
caught me from the first line and held me
throughout.Great job, my friend and, as
always, I thank you for sharing both your
talent and your soul with us.
Be well, and with love,
~dawn |
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Re: * MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 09:36:55 PM AEST
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I am assuming English is a second, or maybe even third language for you. with that said, your challenge is greater than some of us, or at least personally, mine. You pen a very beautiful dream, Sir Venkat and this is lovely in many ways.
Love, whether a dream or reality, is an awesome thing.
Nicely done.
Thank you,
Tim
:-)
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Re: * MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 11:53:58 PM AEST
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i hav to say, this piece is something very different from any poem i've ever read, in a good way of course. the words just carry out that feeling/fantasy/dream u had. i liked the 2nd stanza especially, but this was wonderfully put overall. great job!
take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: * MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 10th September 2009 @ 01:22:26 PM AEST
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Captivating!!!!
Miss your work...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: * MIDNIGHT DREAMS *
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th September 2009 @ 02:47:29 PM AEST
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Very good indeed. The second stanza was world class.
-Phil |
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