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Oh, In My Head
Contributed by
Inevitable
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Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 03:34:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Alone in your head
you try to run away, run away
everyone else has a lovely picture
compared to the fire inside, burning out.
Feed me your lies (my toxic lullabies)
and poison me, just poison me
I'd take it and leave
hemlock like Socrates! (he was greater than me)
I'm listening but I can't hear anything
am I even really here?
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Inevitable
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2009-09-08 15:34:10]
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Re: Oh, In My Head
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by InfinitePoet on
Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 08:43:42 PM AEST
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Right On!!! Very deep and A good job of expressing your feelings!! Your pieces remind me of alot of mine!! Sometimes the insanity and chaos,and confusing lonliness are hard 2 capturee into words, but when you do it usually turns out to be A great work like this one!!! Keep Posting and Keep Writing!!
Peace& Hugz,
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Re: Oh, In My Head
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 06:42:50 AM AEST
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Superb. You conveyed the feelings of insecurity and paranoia perfectly. I particularly enjoyed this little bit:
'Feed me your lies (my toxic lullabies)'
So much imagery and emotion packed into such a small section.
-Phil |
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