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daddy. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 02:28:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I never trusted
anyone
after you. . .
left
. . . it was much too much for me
& so. . .
I (invented) a girl
who existed, (soul)ly in your shadow.
a shade of every (contused) colour
. . . indifference
defiance
fabrication
insecurity
detachment
facade. . .
. . .
listen, as your legacy beckons. . .
insatiable
insignificant
the never-ending sound
of being alone
so strong
the fear
of slamming doors. . .
Copyright ©
elle
... [
2009-09-08 14:28:56]
(Date/Time posted on
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Re: daddy. . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 06:32:08 AM AEST
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Nice write. Deep, emotional and perfectly structured.
-Phil |
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Re: daddy. . .
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by poisonpen00ad on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 05:00:44 PM AEST
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| Powerful and deep...very good |
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Re: daddy. . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th September 2009 @ 09:25:43 PM AEST
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Whenever I read, see, hear, know of abusive parents, I think of this quote from Keanu Reeve's character in Parenthood: You know, Mrs. Buckman, you need a license to buy a dog, to drive a car - hell, you even need a license to catch a fish. But they'll let any butt-reaming ******* be a father. Things like this make me want to cry. This poem made me want to cry.
The pain was powerful in this one, my dear Elle. The emotion tore a new hole in my already weathered heart.
Take care of you .
Much love,
Tim
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Re: daddy. . .
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by hetlerkh on
Monday, 28th September 2009 @ 06:57:26 AM AEST
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hey ......
so great one ,,,i picked it up to read it cuz i wanted to see how does it feel like to have a real dad
i cant call mine a real dad
in every poem of mines u can see some of the hate i have to him in it ...not on purpose but just flowing out cuz its too much,,
well i guess i now know how its like and with your sweet words and expressing u can even make it sweeter .......
take care |
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