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Trying to Find Love
Contributed by
Inevitable
on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 02:57:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Boys trying to find love
underneath the trembling quiver
of soft lips and teary eyes
Night overcomes the day
as happily ever after
becomes farther and farther away
I told you goodbye, because you hurt me
because you hurt me
But I can't rip the I Love You out of me
Falling away from being in your arms
I smother my tears into a pillow,
into the fumes of a cigarette
I let go despite my need
for hands to hold and arms to cradle
Does loneliness eat away at your heart each night?
Who am I without you
And does it have to end this way?
What good is love if it's like this?
I open my eyes to fierce winds
hopeless dreams of you chasing me
but God doesn't speak
Heartache, withdrawal, collapse
I break down and barely breathe
your heart in my hand, mine between your teeth.
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Inevitable
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2009-08-28 14:57:47]
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Re: Trying to Find Love
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by smudger687 on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 03:17:09 PM AEST
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This definitely hits a nerve with me and I would imagine with a lot of people as well.
Especially love the last line, brilliant imagery. |
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Re: Trying to Find Love
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by williamdye on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 07:48:10 PM AEST
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| I find myself in your writing. |
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Re: Trying to Find Love
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 08:14:23 PM AEST
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Wow, this was potent!! Especially that last line. Man, that was emotional.
I really loved this line also,
"But I can't rip the I Love You out of me"
You said with that something I've felt many times but could never
articulate! Damn fine writing here. Wholly emotive!
~ Breezy
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Re: Trying to Find Love
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th September 2013 @ 12:32:55 AM AEST
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Holy *****! That is some intense writing!
I can so relate to this poem.
You really are very talented.
Thankies,
Tim |
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