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~Down Your Dark Road~
Contributed by
shelby
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Monday, 24th August 2009 @ 07:20:30 PM in AEST
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Peaceful where the water flowed
endulging in soft grassy moore
beneath the lofty old pine tree's
the treasure of my lore.
My muse, the song of innocence.
Nature's love intune in me.
Then the rays of sun dispersed
the willows wept, bend and sway....
Gray you turned the world.
Loved into a bitter sickness.
Diseased the country way
of likeness in my heart.
Down your dark road we drove,
lost forever and all time..
cloak and daggers still the breath
wings of virgins fly.....
Forever cursed the beauty
tainted crystal pools
lost inside a whirl of madness
when the tainted breath of hell unfurled.
Look away from the stolen glaze
the gaze of dark with the eyes
knowing is no mystery
swing wide..... open the gates.
Hold onto only air, hold on for all your might.
Bated breath of sins first cause
from then.. no looking back.
The road traveled down your dark road..
Behold the sins of grays,
tainted pools of black and blue
broken jars and dropped flowers
jigsaw perfect break the rules.
Wore your mark you branded
once the beautiful eve.
Scared of shadows and of nothing
the moon seemed to grieve
Down your dark road
voided of all beauty
twisted mind warped into nothing
count the minutes down.
Copyright ©
shelby
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2009-08-24 19:20:30]
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 24th August 2009 @ 07:26:40 PM AEST
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truly enchanting and beautiful..
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by FRANCO on
Monday, 24th August 2009 @ 09:12:51 PM AEST
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Dear loving Friend, it's well conceived and well delivered, The first two phrases are treat to the heart. wonderfully penned my friend.
With lots of love and respect,
FRANCO. |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by emystar on
Monday, 24th August 2009 @ 11:30:12 PM AEST
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A bit sad but beautifully written.
huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by SocialMisfit on
Tuesday, 25th August 2009 @ 12:39:48 AM AEST
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| this speaks to my heart.......i like how the image of innocence fades from the first line to the last. |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by ChenoaShiningwater on
Tuesday, 25th August 2009 @ 01:16:24 AM AEST
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The most hauntingly beauitful write on domestic violence/love gone horribly wrong I have read.It may not be about either of these lol but its just how I perceived it.
Excellent! |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by Loende on
Tuesday, 25th August 2009 @ 03:34:37 AM AEST
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Shall,
I'm so glad I came here...to walk down your
dark road. You've penned a complex and
demanding piece. I love how it just swept
me along. It's a truly amazing write and a
lovely walk. Great job, dear friend. As
always, thank you for sharing it.
Love,
~d |
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th August 2009 @ 02:39:11 PM AEST
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Oh sweetie, this is heart breaking. Life is so dark sometimes. I wish it were not
so. I was drawn in by your disguise--the beginning verses feign the security of
happiness; peacefulness; contentment. But the remaining ones plunge straight-long
into the heart like a dagger of sadness. It is altogether painfully beautiful.
These lines made me stop breathing, momentarily.
"Wore your mark you branded
once the beautiful eve.
Scared of shadows and of nothing
the moon seemed to grieve"
I was devastated and enchanted all at once!
Amazing post, hun. I hope things are looking up for you these days ...
Always here for you ~
*huge hugs*
~ Breezy
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Re: ~Down Your Dark Road~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th August 2009 @ 08:22:41 PM AEST
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This is bleak and somewhat disturbing. Sad and dark. Something, someone destroying all that is beautiful.
More damn fine writing my dear. |
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