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Day 27. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Sunday, 16th August 2009 @ 01:32:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
obsession
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it's more than mere regret.
the loss has become a being
all it's own. .
mostly. . . lingering
with me.
when there's nothing else
(to fill)
large. . .
looming. . .
occupying me.
it's grown bigger
not to mention. . . louder.
the silence is deafening.
can you hear it?
that stark nothingness
where once, love-shaped words
kissed the air.
I have only this obsession. . .
(no longer you)
only the thought of you.
invading my mind
like something inserted
into my flesh. . . my cortex
stabs at my heart. . .
strangles
thoughts. . .
any stream of vision
blurs to memories. . . becomes transparent.
I don't want to see through you.
I did not want to loose-
so I call you up. . . just to hear you voice
hold my breath. . . just to hear you breathe
your nice hello
exasperated good-bye. . .
the cycle begins, anew.
I am so alone
here. . .
holding your memory
close.
Copyright ©
elle
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2009-08-16 13:32:30]
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Re: Day 27. . .
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by orphani on
Sunday, 16th August 2009 @ 02:17:11 PM AEST
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my first read of your stuff el
i have to say after a few lines i began to see your talent.
"that stark nothingness where once love shaped words......" really powerful metaphoric
imagery there.
a few bad c lich'es. alittle long past the point.
you show great promise and skill.
true poets heart.
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Re: Day 27. . .
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by Incognito_Bombastus on
Sunday, 16th August 2009 @ 04:07:11 PM AEST
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& so your vision takes shape a lucidity clear through an unspeakable indescribable clutch of feeling. Finely held and emotive.
Thanks I.B. |
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Re: Day 27. . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd September 2009 @ 07:25:48 AM AEST
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oh elle, this was very painful to read. I found myself hiding amongst
your words. You've conveyed the torture and shame, obsession carries.
Strength is absent when the heart is involved sometimes.
Exquisitely painful ~
~ Breezy
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