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Dear, mother -
Contributed by
fleurdesang
on
Saturday, 15th August 2009 @ 09:03:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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dead-human,
you return to the same silence -
after my rebirth in arms that have forgotten my warmth,
in arms whose contours I cannot place with anything
that is love, that is
unwoman.
heartless womb,
you offer no smiling god -
no resurrecting flame to devour the child you did not embrace,
to perfect the worm you graced with decayed waters,
that lifeless milk, your love-poison.
Perhaps I should have never fallen into your sternum
your hands were wings that day,
and for a moment, the child did not scream,
the larvae was more than just liquid forming
into something wing-less
I felt the throb of freedom between shoulders and spine
I felt the presence of that lost creature, the one that could only love
You held me as mother, instead of absence
and I hate that I died in that transient light,
in the illusion that perhaps this time
you'd hold me forever
.
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fleurdesang
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2009-08-15 09:03:35]
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Re: Dear, mother -
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by orphani on
Saturday, 15th August 2009 @ 10:59:41 AM AEST
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i have to say this composition moved me deeply-- huge talent--deep sense of poetic expression.
a true poet.
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Re: Dear, mother -
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by LadyRose on
Saturday, 15th August 2009 @ 11:37:41 AM AEST
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Wow.....this is a very deep poem......so sad also.Beautifuly written.
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Re: Dear, mother -
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th August 2009 @ 02:47:50 PM AEST
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| God, anger, pain!!! I can feel it. The ol' saying this tugs at the heart strings is insufficient. You write with such power, that saying would be revised to this rips the heart strings out; throws them down to the hot asphalt while pummeling them to a red squishy blob. |
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Re: Dear, mother -
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th August 2009 @ 10:27:33 AM AEST
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Wow! Amazing! Tragic, emotional, powerful and gripping. I especially liked this bit:
your hands were wings that day,
and for a moment, the child did not scream,
the larvae was more than just liquid forming
into something wing-less
Keep up the good work!
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Re: Dear, mother -
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by ming on
Sunday, 6th December 2009 @ 08:46:05 PM AEST
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And again you leave me 'almost' speechless. You talent is something to envy, if I were a spiteful person. But as I am not I just wish I had your words...
ming |
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