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When Good Turns Evil.
Contributed by
Bleedthelove
on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 06:36:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Hands clasped
Grasped around my throat
Like a death note
Frustrated and asphyxiated
That's how I sum up all this time I've waited
Waited for you
Just to put a knife in my back
Panic attack
It's getting hard to breathe
To believe a mouth that can only deceive
Broken heart on my sleeve
With your empty eyes
Mouth full of lies
Walking around in your cheap disguise
What a surprise
Now I've got a stomach full of deceased butterflies
Because the love is gone
No hope left to hang on
Just resentment and hate
Failure to communicate
Addictions and afflictions
Endless convictions
High anxiety
Nervous sobriety
All these scars I can't undo
All the pieces of life I've wasted on you
Dangerously fading
And every second of my life represents time spent hating
Hating the moment I ever met you
Sticking needles in my arm just to forget you
I'm broken and tired
Everything beautiful has expired
Now I'm a junkie
You're a ghost
And somewhere along the way...
We both lost sight of what matters the most.
....Unfortunately I was the only one who cared enough to realize it.
Copyright ©
Bleedthelove
... [
2009-08-07 18:36:15]
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Re: When Good Turns Evil.
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by Chamaron on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 07:14:23 PM AEST
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| Intense. Excellent flow, practically rhythmic. "Broken heart on my sleeve" and "Now I've got a stomach full of deceased butterflies" were creative lines that evoked powerful imagery. Well done. |
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Re: When Good Turns Evil.
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by Ambivalence on
Saturday, 8th August 2009 @ 01:14:19 AM AEST
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very depressing/heartbreaking...hate, resentment, and pain shouldn't deter u, it's only one relationship, u've got many more chances to go. dont waste them with self-harm and anger...great poem with uneven/unconventional format, which i believe depicts your brokenness. take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: When Good Turns Evil.
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by PreciousKitten on
Saturday, 8th August 2009 @ 09:09:06 AM AEST
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| i understand the pain that has been written, i just hope u feel better about this now that its off ur chest now. i know i would be |
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