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Sentenced with a Sentence
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 04:43:29 PM in AEST
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It is no act or accident, no moulded puppet form
That I portray for plaudits or self indulgent praise
You smite my interaction as competing for a prize
And push the fight from self appointed throne of alpha male
You pour your scaulding scorn because you do not understand
Eyes shut, the fool is always blind, the wise man always sees
If you do not accept me do not seek to ridicule
This mind is not some shallow pool like drought stung river bed
You bludgeon me with mocking sneer and vengeful dagger words
Yet where I bleed you will not see, I won't die on this field
I carry shield not slashing blade, but paper thin it tears
Exposes me to jibes and jokes, I fall to stoning crowd
Am I the perpetrator of some dark malicious crime?
I will accept no more than charge of trying to be friends
You sentenced with a sentence, what punishment awaits?
I came with warm embracing heart now frozen with your words
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by Voice of the Silent on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 05:09:44 PM AEST
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I'm sorry someone thinks that of you
I've always thought you a nice person who always has something nice to say
try not to worry about what everyone thinks
no matter how hard you try not everyone will like you
But I think your a nice person
and great poem
hope to read more soon
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by emystar on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 07:03:53 PM AEST
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Joke um if they can't take a good ****. That's one of my mottos. Another one is **** the dumb ****!
I've always thought very highly of you and that's even mentioning your puppy dog eyes.
You got um told and I'm sitting here patting my foot for you.
Luv ya,
emy |
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 07:52:33 PM AEST
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I can relate to this sooooo much and was glad to read it. I understand your sentiments. Not only will men think it's attention seeking, I know at least one woman (my former wife) that would call it flirting. I would say "well, then I flirt with guys too, because all I want to do is be friendly to people; be friends with them; for them to like me; like them; just be nice and to be able to joke around. "
So, I think I know what you speak of. I don't think we're all like that, So I would not be one of those that would "smite" you.
This was a good write and I enjoyed it. Thank you.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by lesoleilnoire on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 08:38:29 PM AEST
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Nicely written emotive piece. I agree with everyone in that you are a genuinely kind person. I can tell from your comments and your poetry that your heart has only room for kindness. Focus on the positive people and shield yourself from the negative. I should follow this advice as I am often hurt as well. Again great piece.
--Heidi W. |
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by shelby on
Friday, 7th August 2009 @ 10:50:31 PM AEST
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Incredible emotive verse!
I also mirror everyone here.
I adore you! Up their rears!
I also do know that it does hurt,
I so understand you here.
It seems people who feel terrible
about themselves get a jealousy factor going
and it is a terrible thing for them to see anyone friendly and with a smile so they strike out. May karma reach up and bite em in their arsssssss that will cause 1000 stings!
Hugs you
Michelle |
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Re: Sentenced with a Sentence
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by Ambivalence on
Saturday, 8th August 2009 @ 12:58:59 AM AEST
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even tho u this wasnt conventional rhyme, this is as great as it is! ur words carried meaning and bold emotion throughout. grade 'A' stuff here...i can empathize quite well. dont stop being an energetic, happy and fun individual! take care
-K.Z. |
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