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Vater und Sohn
Contributed by
christinalwk
on
Thursday, 6th August 2009 @ 12:04:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Upon first glance
Heads mounted upon rusted gears
Facing not the world
Facing each other
Some moment frozen in time
between this father and son
Facing not the world
Facing each other
I feel the gears creak and groan
Unfolding before me the pain
Of facing not the world
Of facing each other
I see the provider cannot run away
That the child cannot chase after
They face not the world
They face each other
His last moment forever captured
Frozen in time his eternal gaze
Still facing not the world
Still facing each other
A bond held for eternity in the gaze of
der Vater und der sohn
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christinalwk
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2009-08-06 00:04:41]
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Re: Vater und Sohn
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by jantra on
Thursday, 6th August 2009 @ 12:16:45 AM AEST
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| very nice! a great example of keeping it simple and letting the words speak for themselves. i wasnt sure about the use of repetition at first but decided it was quite effective to tell this particular story. nicely done! |
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Re: Vater und Sohn
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th August 2009 @ 06:30:23 AM AEST
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If only I could see a better pic of the art work you refer to...then my opinion would be more informed. (Found a not so good pic on the net)
Anyway, I like seeing artful inspiration. Your poem is truly artful and I admire what it was inspired from. Impressive.
Take care and thank you for an enjoyable read.
Tim |
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Re: Vater und Sohn
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th August 2009 @ 06:32:23 AM AEST
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| I also meant to type that I did get an image in my head from this but that image did not resemble the pic I saw of the artwork. |
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Re: Vater und Sohn
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th September 2009 @ 04:59:25 AM AEST
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Yeah, the picture on the web isn't great. However, this was a good poem. It doesn't need the artwork to compliment it.
-Phil |
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