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The Last Swan
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 09:35:46 AM in AEST
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Even when the last swan had left the lake, iced over by winter's fingers
I waited for you by the edge of that glass expanse
Where skeletal trees stood on high hills either side
Stripped bare, exposed to the harsh northern wind
There I walked alone, through rolling morning mist
That bleached out the miles I knew stood between us
My mind flashed images of unity as the snow began to fall
While hands held on to nothing but themselves to stave the chill
White dapples in the low meadows where my feet had walked so many times
Now covered in the carpet that wills all to sleep
On the ridge the pines still whisper hope like generals outflanked
We share the bond of prisoner and both await our fate
There is liberty now and inner calm, as I know you will not come
I will sleep tonight on this pebbled shore, no pillow for my head
When they find me in the morning in my blanket made of white
They will think of me as victim, I will think of me as free
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Re: The Last Swan
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 09:41:09 AM AEST
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Sad indeed, oh yes you moved me to my core with this one. I am wiping tears!
I felt each word, the images in here took me right there, I felt it deeply indeed.
I hope you are ok???? This is very sad.
Hugs you tight and long my friend
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Re: The Last Swan
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by LadyRose on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 11:01:21 AM AEST
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this is to sad..... nearly dropped a tear....
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Re: The Last Swan
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by lesoleilnoire on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 12:44:18 PM AEST
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This piece captured my heart and soul and carried me to this melancholy scene. Writing that captures this much emotion is wonderful indeed. I will look for more of your intensely powerful writing!
--Heidi |
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Re: The Last Swan
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by elle on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 02:59:12 PM AEST
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| The imagery you use is breath-taking. . . with a poignancy that elevates the sadness to beauty & purity. Awesome! :) elle |
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Re: The Last Swan
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by KatsMeow on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 05:10:51 PM AEST
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I can tell you were very emotional when you wrote this poem.
It is very deep, with intense emotion and superb descriptions. It makes me think of friends that have had emotional heartache and wanted to die...or thought that they would.
Keep up the good work and please keep your own emotions positive *Hugs*
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Re: The Last Swan
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 30th July 2009 @ 05:14:07 PM AEST
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Awwww Steve, your sadness comes through every line in this poem, but even in this sadness the beauty of the write shines brightly...
Hope all is well with you..
Hugs
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Re: The Last Swan
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 24th August 2009 @ 07:49:59 PM AEST
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sadly beautiful,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: The Last Swan
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by Spike on
Sunday, 10th July 2011 @ 11:58:27 PM AEST
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top notch writing, never wallowing in maudlin tones or phrase. Beautifully written, with strength and resolve within the grief.
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