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Good bye my love, I hate you
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Sunday, 19th July 2009 @ 01:45:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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In the event of my demise
Should fate see fit to close my eyes
Should time and turmoil steal my breath
And I be touched by peaceful death
If this, by chance, would be my end
Would I be counted as a friend
Or just a man you knew one time
Who left his soul within his rhyme
Perhaps, by passing, I would see
Some hint that you remember me
A little sign, a subtle clue
To justify my love for you
But hints are simply not your way
and signs were never your forte'
A fast good bye the only clue
To one who'd give his life for you
Or am I doomed to never find
That special place inside your mind
Some spot you frequent in the night
A corner hidden from the light
Where I am once again your king...
It honestly won't mean a thing
Nor will the hurtful words you said
Because, you *****, I'll just be dead
L. Carling c2009
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2009-07-19 01:45:57]
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by razorbladekisses on
Sunday, 19th July 2009 @ 01:50:31 AM AEST
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Whoa.
I enjoyed this, a lot. I thought that this was fantastic.
-RBKisses. |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by emystar on
Sunday, 19th July 2009 @ 10:36:11 PM AEST
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Very, very sad but well written.
I hope you feel better now.
Hang tuff, my friend.
big huggs, blessings,
emy
I remember feelings like this in my past but that don't change any thing or ease the pain.
Take care. |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 21st July 2009 @ 07:08:56 AM AEST
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No one wields words like the Master, be they blades or bouquets. Fair dripping with anger and self pity, one to each fang.
hope you didn't cut yourself too bad, but it sure was a treat for the reader.
Spike |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by ChenoaShiningwater on
Saturday, 22nd August 2009 @ 07:44:30 AM AEST
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Hmmm...theres nothing in the comment book thats gonna help me here! lol...okay Im going with OUCH!!
You're still an outstanding writer my ol friend (ok so I got that part from the comment book) *grins* |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 04:13:00 PM AEST
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| This was a very intense and passionate poem. Great job! |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 6th October 2009 @ 08:25:25 AM AEST
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Larry dear, I'm 72 and old and wrinkled more than few............but I will remember you!
A poet that no one can duplicate, not with words, nor passion, nor loving words.
I hope you take this young lady's memories and burying them among your frequented dog t==ds!
Just loved it Larry,
and since I'm so sensitive......I plant violets
neath your comely feet!
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Good bye my love, I hate you
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th February 2016 @ 01:46:07 PM AEST
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| I/'/m a fan. I/'/ll keep an eye out for you now. It seems you have a dark write and that/'/s my favourite type. |
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