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Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
Contributed by
ed
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Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 04:45:00 AM in AEST
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My pupils are radars.
They foresee anxiety.
Locking on, the unease is drawn in,
Channeled through dazed eyes
And deposited in my brain.
It's left to stockpile in the minds rearmost cage.
Seal-proof, air-tight intrapment.
There's no release, no pressure valve.
Pressure builds up.
I start to ache,
Sweat, jolt and shake.
Fear shoots through my body.
Through my veins, around and around and around again.
When will I shatter?
Fragment into dust?
Disolve into the air?
I'm awaiting that day.
In the meantime I will pray.
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by M on
Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 07:29:56 AM AEST
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| such a good poem, im sorry it is this way for you. |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by tkaned on
Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 07:45:32 AM AEST
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| Good poem, i like the way you convey your thoughts in this clever and passionate way, imagination and creativity is the best way to beat down your demons. |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by tease_whizz on
Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 08:19:29 AM AEST
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| love it - you convey the emotion well, combining physical and mental elements for a realistic expression of this feeling. powerful poem, keep them coming, Kate x |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by wolfflow on
Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 04:24:37 AM AEST
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| an excellent poem, keep em coming |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 7th April 2003 @ 05:54:57 AM AEST
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| You've got it wrong. Every hammer blow tempers the sword |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 7th April 2003 @ 05:58:49 AM AEST
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Excellent write of fear and foreboding but..............You've got it wrong.
Every hammer blow tempers the sword |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by LadyDama on
Thursday, 24th April 2003 @ 08:09:38 AM AEST
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| vivid and thought provoking poem... blessings... |
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Re: Awaiting the Day I Shatter, Fragment and Disolve
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by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on
Tuesday, 3rd June 2003 @ 05:11:39 PM AEST
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HI, ed,
this is the first one off your poem i have read,its very good.
keeping praying to never stop.GOD BLESS YOU AND YOURS. |
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