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scars of life
Contributed by
elle
on
Tuesday, 26th May 2009 @ 07:57:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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raised up clever
given texture
viewed
& rubbed
& viewed again. . .
cussed & covered
watched & smothered
viewed
& rubbed
black & blue again. . .
ignored. . . explored
until I'm bored.
viewed
& rubbed
& schooled again. . .
there is no end
these scars, my friend
viewed
& rubbed
subdued again. . .
Copyright ©
elle
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2009-05-26 19:57:36]
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Re: scars of life
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by lesoleilnoire on
Tuesday, 26th May 2009 @ 08:55:17 PM AEST
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| Well-written. Good use of imagery. I look forward to more of your writing. |
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Re: scars of life
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by Voice of the Silent on
Tuesday, 26th May 2009 @ 09:44:16 PM AEST
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Great write, For once I'm not confused by what you write. But we will all alway look back at what happened to us in life trying to rub it away
Anyway great write elle
hope to read more soon
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Re: scars of life
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Wednesday, 27th May 2009 @ 05:58:38 AM AEST
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Interesting write, I liked the use of repetition to emphasise the points you are trying to make
Well done
Steve |
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Re: scars of life
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by one-curly-fry on
Sunday, 7th June 2009 @ 07:03:07 AM AEST
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Wow... you've walked a full path. I can certainly relate to this write; between the endless road of trying to make sense of "self", to learning of the world; fitting in and playing a part, to knowing the burns of others abuse in the many different forms of it and to come to realise, you wear them forever more and there's nothing that can be done, we must but walk on and continue.. and to say all this in more in such style and clever use of words - you have a true talent.
Great write.
Tim |
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