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take it off. . . take off the mask. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Sunday, 24th May 2009 @ 09:50:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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let me scribe my faith
into your unadorned flesh
a pillow book. . .
all knowledge
of a self you chose to embrace
warmly
to cleave unto yourself
each primal edge
a fresher pallor,
a binding.
oh canvas
oh sacrifice
& weeping. . . we
finally share
this peripheral disregard.
Copyright ©
elle
... [
2009-05-24 21:50:30]
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Re: take it off. . . take off the mask. . .
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by venkat on
Monday, 25th May 2009 @ 02:02:23 AM AEST
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So deep are your feelings.. unfathomable yet meaningful words adorn your poetry..this style of writing is inimitable..
God bless..Just cheer up my dear poetess.:-venkat |
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Re: take it off. . . take off the mask. . .
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th May 2009 @ 03:06:23 PM AEST
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| This is an excellent poem. Great job! |
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Re: take it off. . . take off the mask. . .
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th May 2009 @ 08:30:35 PM AEST
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| What I love about your poetry is I can look at it from so many different perspectives. While that may be true of a lot of poetry, it's especially true (at least for me) when I read your work. This first left me thinking, what the heck (honestly didn't use think that word). Then it reminded me of two people coming together, falling in love and lust, while sharing each other's pain. While I am probably off by a mile, that's what I got out of it tonight. Or, well, see, they could also be weeping in joy. See? There goes that other perspective again! |
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Re: take it off. . . take off the mask. . .
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by one-curly-fry on
Sunday, 7th June 2009 @ 06:51:53 AM AEST
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God.. I don't know what to say. In such short punchy lines you describe an amazing connection and detachment. I don't often feel another's work so deeply. You make me want to stop writing due to the feeling that I could never explain a thought so well. I feel this piece very strongly. It struck a major cord in me.
Great piece.
Tim |
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