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Any idea what you've done?
Contributed by
Voice of the Silent
on
Sunday, 17th May 2009 @ 10:30:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Any idea what you've done?
You can't even understand what you've begun
Fear what you've set in motion
You're going to cause a spill of raw emotion
I'm sorry but I have to tell
Before you damn us to hell
You can't let this go through
It will cause harm even to you
You wanted to help us all
But all you’re doing is setting humanity up to fall
Stop now while you have to chance
I beg you don't advance
You're going to trouble the land
And you're going to force my hand
I will stop you
From what you're about to do
Copyright ©
Voice of the Silent
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2009-05-17 22:30:55]
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Re: Any idea what you've done?
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by tothepoint on
Sunday, 17th May 2009 @ 10:35:17 PM AEST
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wow! someone done something but what. If i read this while doing housework or an activiity this poem would stop me haha.
i felt the halt and stop in this piece. great write short and breath taking. |
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Re: Any idea what you've done?
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by theurbanpoet on
Monday, 18th May 2009 @ 04:15:32 AM AEST
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| Once again I am massively impressed kelly! It leaves you shouting at your screen "What has he done!".....Instead of going for the killer line at the end which alot of poets (including myself) usually do you have left us wanting more which is just as affective. Keep up the good work :) |
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Re: Any idea what you've done?
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by Elipsis on
Wednesday, 20th May 2009 @ 03:21:12 AM AEST
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| This was honestly a good piece of poetry! The rythm can be kept and it surely does make one wonder what this person is busy doing... I can feel the anxiety connected to the fact that you need to stop this person, but also the peace you provide with knowing that you will stop this person... Well written! |
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