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run away
Contributed by
LadyDama
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Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 05:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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i want to run away
(words from a song)
this pain too great
felt for too long
writing it out
problems not solved
this sickness abounds
i thought we'd evolved
look in my eyes
see glass tears fall
are you listening
to me at all
you hear every word
this you say
so why am i falling
apart each new day?
ridicule my opinions
though trivial they are
they're mine, not yours
i thought we'd come so far
what can i do
to show you my soul
it's like rotting fruit
in a forgotten bowl
i love you and need you
you laugh in my face
maybe i should fade
away with no trace
please show me the way
our promise in love
please, dark raven
remember your dove
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Re: run away
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 05:36:55 AM AEST
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Awww..this is sweet, tho so sad...
Hnag in there, Dove!!!
Jenni |
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Re: run away
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by venkat on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 06:07:50 AM AEST
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| " what can I do to show you my soul " " may be I should fade away with no trace" God ! ... I agree with Jenni.. dear Lady.,.you should stay.. Venkat |
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Re: run away
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 08:33:00 AM AEST
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| You know every time I read your work I see myself in it! Great write! Hang in there we all get like this! Christina |
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Re: run away
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 08:34:12 AM AEST
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Really touching - the line about "Please, dark raven, remember your dove" - wonderful.
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Re: run away
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 09:09:20 AM AEST
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Good write your pain is evident. But you have many who look forward to reading your next write. And we need your comments to keep us going. So you see you are needed.
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Re: run away
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by Wrybod on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 10:36:09 AM AEST
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Michele
So good to get back
to your poems again
but they're still very black
and so full of pain
Your words are so graphic
exact heavy toll
"Like rotting fruit
in a forgotten bowl"
Now there's poetry
that cuts to the bone
like a fatal inscription
chiselled in stone.
Bob
PS The eye operation went so well yesterday I now have perfect vision in my right eye and they're doing the left eye on 30th April. It's so much easier keeping in touch when you don't have to wear magnifying lenses and sit with your face 6 inches from the screen
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Re: run away
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by shelby on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 01:40:08 PM AEST
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This is so sad. Well written but oh so sad.
I wish for you love, hugs, and kisses everyday!! This is all you deserve.Only the best sweet friend.
Michelle |
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Re: run away
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by karoody on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 02:18:17 PM AEST
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Michelle,
this is a wonderful write. i hate the pain you go through to write it, though. i hope you find your answers soon.
kara |
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Re: run away
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by wolfflow on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 01:49:22 PM AEST
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great write,great poetry
what can i do
to show you my soul
it's like rotting fruit
in a forgotten bowl
that just says it all so well, this happens to us all in every reltionship, like everyone i hope it works out for you |
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Re: run away
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 02:19:38 PM AEST
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firstly; *huggs* n' *lotsa love*!!
this is an excellent write! nessa |
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