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Life
Contributed by
springchic1979
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Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 10:05:00 PM in AEST
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Life
hides deep
and haunts me
in serene sleep
posing as nightmares.
Its overwhelming pain
does quicken my beating heart.
Its vengeful mission becomes plain:
seeking peaceful dreams within slumber
to maliciously administer harm.
It's unmerciful, yet mercifully so
To torment me subconsciously in dreamlike form.
Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©2002 Yvonne Denise Springer
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Re: Life
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by knowWhat_kind on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 10:52:45 PM AEST
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Hi my name is Sarah and I would like to tell you I like your poem a lot it was to me very true sounding great write,
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Re: Life
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by Varro on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:55:45 AM AEST
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I like the pyramid effect, it congers up an image of LIFE at the top of the heap. Your imagery is vivd and passionate. And isn't that the essential element of poetry to evoke a feeling and stir the reader, as I was stirred and moved.
Nice job.
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Re: Life
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 09:13:32 AM AEST
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my interptretation, plz tell me later what i am missing,
first part: dreaming
"Life
hides deep
and haunts me
in serene sleep
posing as nightmares.
Its overwhelming pain
does quicken my beating heart."
second part: within' the dream
"Its vengeful mission becomes plain:
seeking peaceful dreams within slumber
to maliciously administer harm."
third part: the after dream, or feeling a daydream of the dream, thus 'life'
"It's unmerciful, yet mercifully so
To torment me subconsciously in dreamlike form."
?
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Life
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:35:48 PM AEST
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Nessa you are sooooooo close! Thank you very much for trying to figure out what I was saying!
Now...lets see if I can explain this without confusing you :)
"Life
hides deep
and haunts me
in serene sleep
posing as nightmares.
Imagine that you are asleep...and within that sleep you have a VERY realistic dream...and in that very realistic dream you view yourself living an ENTIRE lifetime.
"Its overwhelming pain
does quicken my beating heart.
Ok...ever had a dream that seemed so real...you wake up with your heart pounding?
"Its vengeful mission becomes plain:
seeking peaceful dreams within slumber
to maliciously administer harm."
This poem is trying to depict everything that has happened...is happening...and will happen in my life is ALL a nightmare.
"It's unmerciful" It is unrelenting...the nightmare just keeps going and going and going...
"Yet mercifully so To torment me Subconsciously in dreamlike form"
OK..here I am refusing to acknowledge that this is my reality...I am trying to imply that my entire life is just a lengthy nightmare which I am bound to wake up from...someday...
(for those of you who dont know me and read this IM NOT DEMENTED and this really isnt my outlook on life...lol)
Anyway..hope this helps a bit Nessa *hugs*
Yvonne
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Re: Life
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:39:15 PM AEST
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YAY Varro!!!! You figured out one of the patterns. It is a pyramid-type poem.
Thank you for reading and for the wonderful comment. :)
Yvonne
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Re: Life
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by springchic1979 on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:41:41 PM AEST
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I really appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you feel. I am glad you liked the poem. :) :)
Thank you very much Sarah.
Yvonne
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Re: Life
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by Wrybod on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 01:31:16 AM AEST
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Facinating poem and exchange with Nessa
thank you both so much for "taking me out of myself" I find I need explanations for some poems (I'm a bit of a simple soul)
I've just been through an hour of torment, lying in bed half awake then...........faced up to the day and life, as you say...............
"it's unmerciful, yet mercifully so"
so here I am talking to you |
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Re: Life
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by springchic1979 on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 12:39:21 PM AEST
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments Wrybod! I really want people to understand my poetry....so if you ever need/want me to explain any of my poems...please do not hesitate to ask. :)
Yvonne
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