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untitled.
Contributed by
lilmissy
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Monday, 27th April 2009 @ 03:24:48 PM in AEST
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back as a child, i grew tired of bein a victim.
i packed style through my rhymes, but nobody would listen,
now i'm bichin... just invision bein 12 years old
and livin with a sense that hell could be as close as your home
i'm ALONE inside this world, but i ain't afraid...
i control ALLLLL the words that pave my way
or so i say... i'm this way for a reason, i've seen alotta crap
and when i waste away, BELIEVE that i'll be commin back
i'll never cease to react with the few who need me
if i ever leave, buy a sack and just fkin breeeeeath me
just take it easy... this life is a game
there ain't no need to be competin, we all end up the same
what a shame, i thought i wrote my name on that wall
what it became was false hope and then nothin at all
was somethin wrong? i gotta move on, i can't complain
i've grown wayyy too strong to feel the pain.
Copyright ©
lilmissy
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2009-04-27 15:24:48]
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Re: untitled.
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by The_Phantom on
Monday, 27th April 2009 @ 04:25:09 PM AEST
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Questionable content, but I got you point, you write your rhymes as if you droping a record. Good write.
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Re: untitled.
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by Loende on
Monday, 27th April 2009 @ 08:10:10 PM AEST
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It is questionable content. And while it tells a story, I believe that Phantom is correct in that it sounds more like lyrics. Please, please though....respect the English language. Capitalize, spell check, don't add extra letters, don't embellish what is essentially a decent attempt t prose.
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Re: untitled.
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by lilmissy on
Friday, 1st May 2009 @ 09:30:07 PM AEST
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Well thanks for the honesty,
that's what i like to hear. lol
i just type it how i'd recite it,
know what i mean?
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