|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
trapped
Contributed by
mutantfish
on
Thursday, 23rd April 2009 @ 04:03:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
|
Trapped under cold rocks beneath the sun, digging to get out, starved for fun
Open my eyes beneath the ground, dirt in my eyes, no one around
By trusting in my ability, I lost my sense of responsibility
by forgetting my world and friends, makes it feel like the end
Struggle and squirm, wriggling in the mud like a drying up worm
I want to yell but my voice wont escape the night
I want some help, but I lost the will to fight
Copyright ©
mutantfish
... [
2009-04-23 16:03:12]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: trapped
(User Rating: 1 )
by kye on
Thursday, 23rd April 2009 @ 05:35:19 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Your poem gave so much insight to the struggles you are going thru. May your poetry help to free you by expressing your feelings.
You did very well in your descriptions of your emotional state.
I hope it gets easier for you.
Kie |
|
|
Re: trapped
(User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on
Friday, 24th April 2009 @ 02:11:50 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Trapped under cold rocks..... Right from the very start of this poem I felt such emotion tinged with sadness.
I feel trapped right now, like I said right at the start I was caught.......
Do not lose the will to fight, it may seem it is gone but it is still there buried somewhere, reach and find it.
I hope you will be ok.
Hugs
Michelle |
|
|
Re: trapped
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th April 2009 @ 04:27:35 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
i know the feeling. stay strong, keep writing and you will be victorious.
-Phil |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
