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Lost
Contributed by
dhart420
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Tuesday, 21st April 2009 @ 09:11:49 PM in AEST
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I'm lost
The path I once followed
Long since passed
Wrong choice there,
Should have made a right.
But thats the story of my life
Strife
Not to say that I didn't try
I just fell short
Underestimated
I have lived life's trials
Few I failed
Several I've passed
Many more to come.
I am not unarmed
I come prepared
I made many mistakes
From these I learn
They are my defense
Against the trials I must yet face.
Lost I may be
Defenseless I am not
I will blaze my own trail
Until I find my place
Claim my title,
Leader of destiny
Copyright ©
dhart420
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2009-04-21 21:11:49]
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Re: Lost
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 22nd April 2009 @ 07:47:39 PM AEST
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Much confidence is seen in the lines "They are my defense Against the trials I must yet face"..
and much hope is seen in these lines
"I will blaze my own trail Until I find my place Claim my title"
Its o.k. its a good poem.:-) venkat
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Re: Lost
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd April 2009 @ 01:36:42 PM AEST
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As per your request and quite honestly, the bottom line is whatever floats your boat is what is going to make good or bad poetry in your eyes, my eyes and every other reader's eyes. Eyes, of course, being the obvious metaphor for an individual's perspective, judgment, and opinions. I have had people tell me "that is the best poem you have written" and others say "I just don't like it" about that exact same poem. So what matters most is what matters to you. I came so close last night to posting a poem. I had my little html codes in, etc etc and at the last moment I decided I didn't like it. I am confident at least one person would have liked it but I did not.
So, really, in all absolute reality, It doesn't matter what anyone says... you are the final judge of your writings.
Now, do I think this is a good poem? Yes. Do I think it's a great poem? No. Does my opinion matter...perhaps, but it shouldn't.
It makes a statement about choices you want to make in life but who needs anyone to state the obvious?
Just do what you think is best.
Next, if it is all that other stuff I keep seeing here, rhyme, meter, critique, prose, scale, flow, you're looking for, please, I suggest taking a class.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: Lost
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by thewizard on
Saturday, 25th April 2009 @ 12:02:31 PM AEST
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| We all have trouble in our lives, it is nice to see someone who is willing to fight back |
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Re: Lost
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by razorbladekisses on
Sunday, 26th April 2009 @ 01:10:42 PM AEST
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I second thewizard.
Once again, another good poem(:
much love
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