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An Attempt at Love
Contributed by
matariel
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Sunday, 19th April 2009 @ 05:51:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Should I unite with you?
Pull back this veil of blue
Streaming from my eyes
Can I give myself to you?
Can I melt into you?
My fiery heart burning anew
Explosive flames, cherubic fire
Can I dissolve into you?
May I be absorbed into you?
Eyes, pools of light, ring true
Blue and liquidous, white and intense
May I recede into you?
Should I conjoin myself to you?
Skin and flesh, blood and sinew
Face of a god, angular and bright
Can I collapse into you?
No you may not, you don't understand
You're just a friend; I'm an uninterested man
This kind of love would consume us both
You know I can't do this, you know who I am
Copyright ©
matariel
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2009-04-19 17:51:45]
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Re: An Attempt at Love
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by freckle on
Sunday, 19th April 2009 @ 06:04:03 PM AEST
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Ah yes, I think most of us have experienced this love before! Boy does it hurt!
Good write. Very well expressed. Hope there are happier, love filled days ahead for you!
Thanks for sharing!
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Re: An Attempt at Love
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by Matariel on
Sunday, 19th April 2009 @ 06:13:44 PM AEST
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| Thanks! Others, please vote, critique, and comment if you have time. Thanks! |
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Re: An Attempt at Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th April 2009 @ 04:00:48 PM AEST
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good wirte, i liked the punchy ending, i think it worked well.
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