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Eye Of The Storm
Contributed by
zenith66
on
Sunday, 12th April 2009 @ 11:22:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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The doom-noise tumbles in. no colors flee the eye of it.
Miles on windy miles succumb, sunlight cant get in.
Nothing tells the day from night beneath this grey-black roof,
This charged procession of cloudy walls,
There is no way out, not now the eye has opened wide,
A zero gravity calamity, the lid wont blink till the world is done,
Closer and closer it falls, earths old face upturned, waiting,
Bracing, , for the torrential impact.
I am stormbound. But first the mountains must go down,
Wrenched from there age old foundations, the bedrock liquidates,
Cyclonic hands follow, they are livid. Vortices's eating ground
In soaring spouts, this is invincibility.
I hear the distant boom of rain. Before it touches down.,
No earth-sea could match this wave, this dark shield floating terribly,
Draped across horizons spheroid span, digesting the skyline,
I imagine this is the end,
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Re: Eye Of The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th April 2009 @ 11:45:35 AM AEST
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And again, with the vivid and brilliant descriptions! zenith, my friend,
you seem to challenge each piece just a bit further up the scale. This
sounds like some incredible storm! I especially love this:
"No earth-sea could match this wave, this dark shield floating terribly,
Draped across horizons spheroid span, digesting the skyline,"
DAMN! digesting the skyline- now THAT is some line!
You have a fine piece of poetry here, zenith, filled with all magnificent
imagery and descriptions I've come to expect from you. Well done, poet!
~ Breezy
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Re: Eye Of The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th April 2009 @ 01:17:00 PM AEST
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Okay, I'm with Breezy!!! So yeah, what she said and in addition to that:
Reading this was like hearing that dramatic music that they sometimes put in movies along with the grand crescendo blaring!!!
An amazing piece of work.
One little thing though... "The world ends in a stormy vision hope you enjoy". NOT... I'm not going to enjoy the end of the world. ;-) Just kidding, I knew what you meant but it did look kind of funny at first.
Take care and thank you for a wonderfully enjoyable read.
Tim |
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