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A breath of Blood and Ashes
Contributed by
Loende
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Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 07:02:46 PM in AEST
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With a breath of blood and ashes, I will move
Through all you have protected and held dear,
All the paper houses and folded treasures
And I will burn them from the inside out
With all the fury that gallops through my veins.
You think you’re safe there, behind your walls
The same ones you’ve built with lies and guile
Away from me and mine and all we represent
But there is nothing that will stand after I exhale.
You will fall like all the others before you.
And when it’s done and the smoke blows black death
I will throw back my head and dance beneath your ruin
Because I gave you chances to turn your own tide
To stop this final ravaging ride within the dark of night
Remember that when you are turned away by the light.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2009-04-08 19:02:46]
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 07:16:13 PM AEST
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I felt this huge surge of power through me while reading this. I feel your energy. It is an incredible and dark write. What brought it on??
Hugs you
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by 3660Days on
Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 07:33:12 PM AEST
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Some of these lines were quite brilliant, with excellent, memorable imagery:
-All the paper houses and folded treasures
And I will burn them from the inside out
-But there is nothing that will stand after I exhale.
-I will throw back my head and dance beneath your ruin
Those were my favorite part, anyhow. Nicely done. |
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 08:02:36 PM AEST
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Wow, D, remind me to never make you angry ;-)
Really, though, this is powerful. It's unfortunate that troubled life must spawn great poetry but alas, poetry is life, eh?
*huge huge hug*
Luff,
Timmy |
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 8th April 2009 @ 11:45:36 PM AEST
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Wow..what a dark fiery spirit of death raises here to rage down the walls built with lies and guile..
dear dawn I feel the surge of your spirit.. :-)venkat
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by PreciousKitten on
Thursday, 9th April 2009 @ 07:36:12 AM AEST
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| the power of this poem is so raw n strong that i can't of it anymore because thats how good it is. |
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 21st April 2009 @ 06:35:00 PM AEST
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Oh yes... VERY powerful, seething with a vengeful anger, a low growl of something hidden, and relentless. I love this. I'm partial to dark writing, and unfortunately the work that I see sometimes has grown tedious, but you added a lovely flare. The title drew me in immediately. Excellent imagery, I enjoyed this quite thoroughly, thank you for sharing with us, dear Loende, and many thanks for your comment, :). I do appreciate it very much. You'll see more of me on your page.
~Stephy.
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by freckle on
Wednesday, 22nd April 2009 @ 04:08:28 PM AEST
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Great prose. I love your imagery..the fury galloping through your veins....
The smoke blowing black death....just wonderful!
(Sorry, I got interrupted and lost my train of thought.)
I enjoyed this poem tremendously. Thank you!
Carol |
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Re: A breath of Blood and Ashes
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by Voyager on
Monday, 23rd December 2013 @ 12:25:12 AM AEST
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| Yatudhani - The delight of destruction |
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