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Her
Contributed by
Scribbler
on
Saturday, 4th April 2009 @ 09:33:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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I wish you knew
Just how crazy you make me
Just how angry I get
Just how painful it is
to know you are still in love with her.
I wish you could see that it tears me apart
limb
by
limb
drop
by
drop
Until there is nothing left.
[but my feelings for you]
I wish I could tell you
Just how much I adore you
Just how much I want you
That you are the only one that matters
Except her
For as long as she is in your mind
I’m not.
I wish you could tell.
The silence you hear is me trying to decide
[Is it worth being second best?]
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Scribbler
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2009-04-04 21:33:31]
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Re: Her
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by 3660Days on
Sunday, 5th April 2009 @ 03:46:30 AM AEST
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Ah yes...as a wise poet once wrote,
"...poetry is the subtle alchemy of a sensitive soul...?
like hell it is
poetry is what squeezes out of you
when you've been squashed by Life, like a bug"
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Re: Her
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th April 2009 @ 06:18:25 AM AEST
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| hard situation, been there done that. but anyway i really enjoyed this write sometimes the only way to get through things is to write them down. it makes us think about whats going on. definately keep writing im looking forward to reading more |
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Re: Her
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th April 2009 @ 11:40:26 AM AEST
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I think many of us can relate to these feelings of being on the back burner... or even further back. *sigh* Hope things get better for you.
I like the poem, the way you conveyed your emotions is very well done and I especially like the way you formatted your write. It stresses the emotion in my opinion and makes it more real.
Thank you for an enjoyable read and take care.
Tim |
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Re: Her
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th April 2009 @ 12:00:01 PM AEST
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There's something about you that's been puzzling me... I haven't quite figured it out yet lol. I really liked this. I think the situation in general is exactly that - general, not regarding its worth or value, but in the sense that I think most can relate. Even myself.
Sometimes an old love, is hard to let go of. Not by choice but because of attachment. Once you love someone you create not only a physical bond but a really strong emotional and mental bond as well. You learn as much about the other as you can and it brings you closer. You learn to trust and confide in one another - and to just let go of all that in a moment, isn't possible. In my opinion.
I really like your style, I also incorporate a lot of italics and bolding in my writing, I find it helps create different levels of emphasis and states.
Very nice post.
Hopefully you'll be posting more soon?
-Cassy |
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