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Something Not Quite Tangible.
Contributed by
3660Days
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Thursday, 2nd April 2009 @ 11:51:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
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It seems that we're all looking
for that someone in our lives;
the girls look for husbands, and
the men all look for wives,
but the only one I wanted,
is now dancing in the stars,
arguing with Venus,
and making love to Mars,
and when the day is over,
and when the sun has set,
all that I can promise is
that I will not forget.
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Re: Something Not Quite Tangible.
(User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on
Friday, 3rd April 2009 @ 12:46:20 AM AEST
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Don't put your writing down like that, please.
This is really good writing.
I luv thr part bout but the only one I wanted,
is now dancing in the stars,
arguing with Venus,
and making love to Mars
Awesome.
Huggs, blessings, confidence,
emy |
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Re: Something Not Quite Tangible.
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by MarcRob on
Friday, 3rd April 2009 @ 01:28:29 AM AEST
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dancing in the stars
arguing with venus
and making love to mars
sounds like the one you want is already taken and she took someone from someone else.
Good write, write some more I will read.
And never ever say your poems are not good
you have the gift of words to show emotion don't lose that :D |
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Re: Something Not Quite Tangible.
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by PreciousKitten on
Friday, 3rd April 2009 @ 06:39:58 PM AEST
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| when ya right, ya right. i liked that when you admit your love when the day was over. thats why i liked that. |
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